Haru Nagasaki  


 ZEN garden  – spring by Haru Nagasaki

August 2022 - ZEN garden – spring

August 2022 - Haru Nagasaki

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About the Image(s)

This is a small scene with a creek and plants.

The young horsetails (I am not sure how it is called in English exactly) caught my eyes.

It has small creek, young butterbur leaves, and bunch of horsetails are beautifully aligned for my eye. It looks like a small ZEN garden.

I shot with landscape and portrait but I chose portrait because it give a sense of depth in my view.

Now questions to the group;

1. Does the composition work for you? Or do you think it is too busy and complicated?
2. To take out the color factor, I tried BW conversion as well. (attached in Original section ) Which do you prefer, color version or BW?
3. Do you have any other idea to make it better?

I welcome any comments and suggestions.

Nikon D850 ISO31 26mm f13 1.6sec. PL filter, tripod


5 comments posted




Dan Mottaz   Dan Mottaz
Hi Haru, it's a peaceful, pleasing image. I like the S-curved stream. But I feel that the Horsetails compete with the stream. To my eyes, they are too bright. I might suggest cropping about halfway down the Horsetails and darking a small bit. This might help uncomplicate your picture.
I prefer the color but this is a matter of personal taste. You might consider dropping the green saturation.   Posted: 08/03/2022 08:21:21
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Hi Dan,
Thank you for your comments.
I shot 2 version (as mentioned in description). I am attaching the landscape version here.
As you suggested, I dropped down the saturation and darkened down the horsetail a little bit.
How about this for your eye now?   Posted: 08/03/2022 23:36:55
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Dan Mottaz   Dan Mottaz
Looking better! I am always uncomfortable with interjecting my vision on other people's photos. However, try cropping at least a third off the left side. To me there's a lot a dead space there that might not be necessary.   Posted: 08/04/2022 09:30:29
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Dan. This looks much simpler.
Please be open to share your eye with me. I would like to learn from you. I respect your good eye and perspectives.
  Posted: 08/04/2022 21:14:50
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Gloria Grandolini   Gloria Grandolini
Hi Haru - I like the most the image you posted at the end of the dialogue with Dan. I also felt the top left portion of original image was not really needed to convey the zen emotion - and the piece of tree trunk was not that pleasing to my eye. I definitely prefer the color version - the different tones of green are gorgeous. To improve it maybe I would have added a bit more of the stream in the image to the left of the horsetails.   Posted: 08/05/2022 15:34:56



 

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