Haru Nagasaki  


 Autumn Fall(Revisited) by Haru Nagasaki

January 2022 - Autumn Fall(Revisited)

January 2022 - Haru Nagasaki

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About the Image(s)

Happy new year, everyone. Hope you spent happy holidays.

This is the same composition presented in Oct round. (I am attaching here)

I revisited this place to make this work by incorporating the input I got from you.

Main input was: 1. A lot of distractions and need to simplify, 2. Separation of waterfalls is a key, and 3. Debate on rocks in the foreground “does it work and necessary?

This time, the water volume is less than in Jun, so it was easier to place the waterfall in the center of the frame (made by the unique tree).

I left the rocks in the foreground "I thought it has a good diagonal line to the fall.

I added a person who is looking the fall from back of the cave. I thought it will add another element and story. I have another version without the person so please comment on this point

I feel the autumn colors in the tree looks over-saturated just a bit “ please let me know if you feel the same way as well.

Anyway, I would appreciate your comments and suggestions.

Equipment: Nikon D850 @23mm ISO64 f11 1.3sec. PL filter, Tripod.


15 comments posted




Dan Mottaz   Dan Mottaz
Hi Haru, Happy New Year to you.
It pays to return to an area rich in photographic opportunities. You really nailed it with this image. Your January photo is quite exceptional. What a nice improvement with the fall colors. I like the subtle ways you simplified your composition.
The autumn colors are not over-saturated. The tone and color looks perfect. From my point of view, I would definitely remove the person in the falls. It is very odd looking and presents a distraction away from the scene. The solitude without the person contributes to the story. This is the kind of shot that would make me think that no one has ever been there before.
Compositionally, I like the circle that frames the waterfall and directs my eyes to where you intend me to look.
Your shot excites my visual sense. Frame it and put it on your wall. Enter it in contests, you should do well. Way to go!   Posted: 01/03/2022 12:27:13
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Dan for your comments. It encourage me a lot.
I am not like a person who chases new places but I visit the same location repeatedly. When I come back, I try to incorporate the feedback from the group to improve my image.
I really appreciate your honest feedbacks.   Posted: 01/03/2022 21:15:10
Dan Mottaz   Dan Mottaz
You are very welcome, Haru. As I said above, it's an image that deserves recognition. Nice work!   Posted: 01/04/2022 08:25:11



Robert Atkins   Robert Atkins
Hi Haru. Happy New Year! I like this version much better than the original. I think you've eliminated the distractions, and I think the color from the autumn trees is a nice addition (and not over saturated), particularly in contrasting the cool tones you've given the falls. I am not a big fan of the person under the falls - I'd opt for the version without. I'd also clone the bright branch at the extreme upper right which pulls my eye up there. Finally I might darken the lower left corner and left edge a bit - they fall outside the frame you've created and also pull my eye away from the otherwise well showcased falls. All small things. It is a beautiful image - the color balance and composition are excellent.   Posted: 01/08/2022 19:28:10
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Robert for your comments.
I will make final adjustment based on your comments.   Posted: 01/11/2022 01:35:22



Bob Wills   Bob Wills
Hi Haru,
Such a beautiful place to be able to visit. I'm sorry that the area didn't have more rain to keep the water volume up, but we will be happy to send you all the downpours we have received in Washington and California via Hawaii.
1. The lady behind the falls doesn't add to the serenity of the story, in my opinion
2. I'm surprised that your PL filter didn't cut through the mist more. The haze in the middle looks about the same in both images, and to me does pose an issue of mild proportion.
3. The falls seem brighter but have that typical blue cast. I am not a huge fan of blue water since I know it is clear, not blue.
4. I've added a more fallish color gradient to your image, but probably more browns than Japan sees.

I really like your images, just trying different perspectives.   Posted: 01/10/2022 12:36:19
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Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Bob for your comments.
I will use the image without the person behind the fall for the final adjustment.
Mist is added manually to cover up the bright sky. RAW does not have mist as it is shown in the image here.
Blue casted waterfall looks unnatural now for my eyes, too.
Your edit look unnatural due to too reddish colors in my eye.
Thank you, again.   Posted: 01/11/2022 01:40:57
Bob Wills   Bob Wills
I knew this would not appeal to you. More of a Midwest US fall. Your artistic vision is excellent.   Posted: 01/11/2022 10:53:43



Gloria Grandolini   Gloria Grandolini
Hi Haru, I am torn because I really like your original photo. It was mysterious, and majestic with the 2 waterfalls. A place I would like to go and sit for hours in solitude with the sound of the water falling. I do like the color addition with the fall foliage hues. I agree that the person does not fit in. Also - getting closer in focuses the eye on the waterfall. I always have to deal with the issue of wanting to add more background to give a sense of the environment, and maybe it takes away from main message.   Posted: 01/11/2022 16:31:06
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you for your comments!   Posted: 01/15/2022 07:05:25



Cheryl LaLonde   Cheryl LaLonde
Hi Haru
I really love the fall colors, I think it adds to the image. I would remove the person. I think the placement of the person is too centralized and they are too bright in the scene. Maybe if they were wearing darker clothing and not in the center of the image..... but I tend towards no human element. It's always good to experiment. when I was looking at the image there is a distinct line near the top of the image where the colors get brighter and crisper. It is almost as if you have added a haze below the line. I kind of like the coloring and look of the non hazy portion and wonder if the image would look better without the haze. I tried to remove it a little and I like it better but it is all a matter of taste. I really do love this image though, wonderful job. I agree with Dan you should print it and put it on a wall in your home.   Posted: 01/15/2022 13:37:29
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Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Cheryl for your comments.
I was trying to accommodate a person to add story but it sounds like it did not work well. I will finish this with the version without the person.
I increased the mist to cover the sky. I was afraid that distracts your eye.
Thank you anyway for pointing out.   Posted: 01/15/2022 18:15:31
Bob Wills   Bob Wills
If I were you, I might try to fade her luminance value some before giving up on whether a person could make the image what you envision. She has inherited the bright blue of the waterfall and that makes her stand out too much, almost like she was added in processing. Her color, tone and luminance all match the values in the bluest water stream.
Just a thought I had earlier, then forgot to mention. I am getting older by the day!   Posted: 01/16/2022 12:31:31



Bev Caine   Bev Caine
(Groups 48 & 80)
I love the image but I'm not sure about the person. To me she looks like she's floating under the falls. You might try to move her more toward the stream. For me she doesn't work where she is.   Posted: 01/18/2022 12:26:00



Emily Kawasaki   Emily Kawasaki
Great shot, Haru. The autumn colors are very striking against the lush green moss and ferns on the rocks in the foregroundand background. Also I like how this edit also shows more texture/details of the twisted vine (?) I agree with Bev that the person looks not so grounded (i.e. hovering/flating a bit.) In the foreground. My eye caught what looks to be a line/edge of an overlay over the tree/in the upper part of the image. However, that could just be an optical illusion. I drew the line in purple on the image. Aside from that, beautiful shot and great edit!   Posted: 01/19/2022 16:33:45
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