Haru Nagasaki  

The big tree in Autumn by Haru Nagasaki

November 2021 - The big tree in Autumn

About the Image(s)

Composition: Use river shore as leading line toward the tree. Since the autumn color of the tree was so beautiful, I abandoned all the color except the tree.

My intention is to highlight the tree, but at the same time, the scale of the scene. I am not sure that you could catch it instantly but there is a boat in the river.

I wanted to show the scale in comparison with the boat.

Buy the way, the whites on the river shore are not snow but it is limestones

I might get a suggestion of cropping tight to highlight the boat, but I will start from here.

Equipment: Nikon D850 @27mm ISO64 f13@ 1/2sec.

This round’s discussion is now closed!
16 comments posted

Robert Atkins   Robert Atkins
Hi Haru. Wow, that is an amazing tree. The color is great, but when I see the boat and realize the size of the tree, but at the same it's elegance - wow. It has grace like a tree much smaller in size, but it's not. I like the composition with the leading line - there is a lot to explore once you tire of the tree - and I'm not sure who would tire of it.

I think the problem though is conveying the scale. I did not recognize the boat as a boat until I read your description. Even then I kept thinking, Haru must mean a toy boat. There are no other obvious cues to the scale, and the boat is, well, small, and hard to see as such, and believe as such. Cropping as you suggest might help by emphasizing it, but I like the composition as is. I just need another cue to the size. The one other thing I'd look at is the whites in the stones. They look blown out or close to me, but maybe it is the web jpg.

At the end of the day, it is a beautiful shot even if the scale is less than clear.
  Posted: 11/06/2021 13:47:34
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Robert, for your comments.
As you pointed out, I should have looked for other way to deliver the scale of this scene.
Or I should have kept the color of the boat, which is blue, for easier catch in the image...   Posted: 11/08/2021 23:04:37

Cheryl LaLonde   Cheryl LaLonde
Hi Haru
This looks like a wonderful spot. You seem to know just where to go for interesting landscapes. The yellow tree is stunning! I too did not see the boat until I read your description. I like your composition but wonder if removing all color was a good choice if you wanted attention on the boat as well for scale. With the boat having no color it seems to get missed. Maybe a more muted color palette then enhancing the areas you want to bring attention to with stronger color or make them brighter than the rest of the image. Maybe cropping in tighter might help to bring more attention to it but I think it needs more than that.   Posted: 11/06/2021 18:15:32
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Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Hi Cheryl,
Thank you for your comments.
It might worth to try your idea of "muted color vs. stronger color".
Let me try that if it works.   Posted: 11/08/2021 23:08:15
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Hi Cheryl,
I reedited based on your suggestion - muted the color version.
How does this look for you now?
  Posted: 11/17/2021 21:59:54
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Dan Mottaz   Dan Mottaz
Hi Haru. What I like in your image is the diagonal line of the river that flows from the lower Left corner. Then it becomes more of an implied line as it fades away before it reaches the top right. The boat - which I saw before reading your description - holds my eye for a moment. Them I'm pulled over to the colored tree. I appreciate your experimentation with everything being B&W except the tree, but as Cheryl suggests, I feel it needs muting. As we know, warm colors and brighter areas of an image attract our attention. So, what I'm seeing is competition for my eye's attention between the tree and the bright area on the rocks. This makes for a visually busy image. Unfortunately, I have little to offer that would help improve your photo other that going back to your RAW image and work with toning down those highlights.
On the positive side, the boat is a nice touch. It's subtle which allows your viewer the pleasure of discovery. Seeing the people in the boat places the viewer in the scene. Your image has great potential and you have an eye for seeing unique scenes. Please show us what you finally make of this.   Posted: 11/15/2021 12:14:36
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Dan for your comments.
I see what you are saying.
Let me work on this again and post it if time allows.
Talk to you soon.   Posted: 11/15/2021 22:06:08
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Hi Dan,
I am attaching the re-edited version.
I muted the color except the big tree. I added a blue tint just a little to off-set the warm colors overall.
And add vignette at last.

Does this look better now?
  Posted: 11/17/2021 21:57:41
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Dan Mottaz   Dan Mottaz
Hi Haru; yes, I think this works very well. The rocks are not overexposed and the blue tint gives your image a peaceful feel. Nice going.   Posted: 11/20/2021 16:44:10
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Dan for your comments. I value your input.
  Posted: 11/21/2021 04:19:01

Bob Wills   Bob Wills
Hi Haru,
Not only do I think that you shared a highly creative image, but I too am amazed at the scale of this tree. I'm not a big fan of selective color, but I can see why you chose to create this image. I like the leading line of the water, and the depth you have created with a hazy background. I cropped slightly using the boat as a horizontal line.
I can't tell if this is one tree or several. There are a couple of yellow areas at the bottom that seem separate from the tree. The boat would need to be changed from blue to yellow to keep your selective color intent, although rules are meant to be brokem, so who knows. Wonderful scene, Haru.   Posted: 11/15/2021 18:05:57
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Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Bob for your comments.
I recall that it is one big tree, if I am not mistaken.
I will come back with the re-edited version after incorporating all the input here. Please bear me for a moment….
And thank you for your help, Bob.   Posted: 11/15/2021 22:13:54
Bob Wills   Bob Wills
You are welcome, and I look forward to your next interpretation. Highly creative image.   Posted: 11/16/2021 07:55:11
Bob Wills   Bob Wills
Hi Haru,
The re-edited version above does address some of the issues we've raised but it is no longer feels like a selective color image to me. Is that what you want? The story of your tree, and its size is still told, and I like it. Better is still a relative term and you must stay true to YOUR vision. The only thing I might still look at is whether the image would benefit by being slightly blurred (gaussian) to make the eye go to the tree by being the sharpest part of the image.   Posted: 11/18/2021 07:35:58
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Hi Bob,
Thank you for your message.
It would not be my final edit.
I just produce the image based on their input.
I expect them to feedback me physically looking at the re-edited version.
I value this process to widen my perspective and practice editing skill.
At the end of the day, I might end up keeping BW except the big tree and boat (painted yellow) as you suggested.
I appreciate your comments anyway.   Posted: 11/19/2021 08:25:04

Emily Kawasaki   Emily Kawasaki
Great shot and very interesting edit Haru. I especially like the edited versions based off Cheryl and Dan's feedback. Your image reminds me of the antique/vintage hand-painted photographs and postcards. The colors you selected a muted and delicate, and really give the composition depth and three-dimensionality. Thinking about the scale of the tree compared to a boat or human is pretty amazing too.   Posted: 11/22/2021 16:42:28