Haru Nagasaki  


 The fall in spring by Haru Nagasaki

September 2021 - The fall in spring

September 2021 - Haru Nagasaki

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About the Image(s)

I joined this group starting this month.

This month image “ My main focus is to present the details of waterfall and a bit of new greens in spring.

Composition: I originally shot with water flows at lower right corner (refer to original), trying to use the waterflows as leading line to the main fall.

But I was afraid that the stream guide your eyes slipping away from the frame, so I end up cropping tight to eliminate that portion.

Post processing: I remain dark overall tones. I wanted to add mood here and make the image mysterious. Does this work?

Nikon D850 @17mm ISO400 f11 1/25 Tripod


11 comments posted




Cheryl LaLonde   Cheryl LaLonde
Hi Haru! Welcome to the group.
I really love what you have done with the colors of the green foliage. I creates a nice depth to the image. I understand why you cropped the way you have but to me it feels like the water has no where to go without that lower right hand corner. I would put it back in and darken it with a gradient so it is not so white. I would also decrease the highlights at the bottom of the waterfall. This is such a beautiful image. I love the feeling of serenity I experience when I look at it.   Posted: 09/10/2021 14:01:56
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Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Cheryl for your comment and input.
I like your edit very much.
It is my pleasure if you feel serenity from the image. That is the story I would like to deliver   Posted: 09/10/2021 23:23:11



Dan Mottaz   Dan Mottaz
Welcome to Group 96, Haru. It's good to have you. I have enjoyed reading your comments. You obviously have a love for photography. Your enthusiasm shows it.
Who doesn't love waterfalls? They show the power and strength of water. You displayed that power well with your choice of shutter speed.
I agree with Cheryl's comments. The water needs a place to go to complete the composition. Darkening it works to pull the eye back to your center of interest.   Posted: 09/10/2021 14:50:05
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Dan for your comments.
Yes, I would try to rework to darken down. It would be better to tell a story.   Posted: 09/10/2021 23:27:47



Bob Wills   Bob Wills
Welcome, Naru. I'm happy you are fully participating this month. Your image has pop with the greens and whites. Your exposure looks great to me. Your focus is sharp, and the composition is good, but to me it seems a little off horizontally. The distortion may be due to the wide-angle lens, but it makes me wonder. It may just be me since no one else has mentioned it. I'll just add my version and see if it helps make sense of my words. I lose some of the greenery in the crop though, which probably also changes the mood.
  Posted: 09/10/2021 20:11:24
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Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Bob for your comments.
Your cropping provide completely different story from mine.
I appreciate your guidance to the different perspective.
  Posted: 09/10/2021 23:29:46
Bob Wills   Bob Wills
My crop did remove all the mood and mystery that you provided in your version, so my other option would be to try a horizontal flip for western viewers, who would enter left to right, and dodge the lower water runoff as the entry point to either view. The green areas that you dodged to lead into the falls is a subtle, and effective edit. I think your image should do well in competition.   Posted: 09/11/2021 08:36:05
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Bob, for your comments.
I still have a long way to go!   Posted: 09/16/2021 21:02:09



Robert Atkins   Robert Atkins
Hi Haru. Again, welcome. It is great to have you join the Group. I have to say I cheated and looked at the B&W version of the falls you have over in Group 74. I like the color image here - particularly how you have brought out the delicate light on the foliage near the top of the frame. But I really like the treatment of the water in the monochrome image. You used a little slower shutter speed there which gives it a little more ethereal feel, but then beyond that, you did a masterful job of bringing out the subtle tonalities in the water in the B&W. I think you could do more of that in the color version here. I have the same comment as others about the water needing a place to go, a problem which is solved with the tighter crop Bob suggests or that you used in the monochrome. I also understand what Bob was talking about with the horizontal being off - it is probably just a perspective thing but it feels like the area the water lands is tilted to the left. Finally, the birds eye view works for the tight crop, but I'm still not as sure how I feel about it here. But we were not there like you to walk around and find the best composition, so probably unfair to comment. I like the color image here, but I really love the monochrome.   Posted: 09/11/2021 14:16:38
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Robert, for your comments on both color and monochrome version. Currently, due to COVID situation, I can not make international flight. So I am searching all over Japan to find the good shooting spots. Waterfalls is one of them. Japan has so many waterfalls to visit. Currently I am trying to add uniqueness in my image - in this case, birds eye view and quality of texture of stream - this is my challenge at this moment. But your comments encourage me a lot. Thank you!   Posted: 09/16/2021 21:00:21



Emily Kawasaki   Emily Kawasaki
Welcome to the group, Haru.
I love how the stillness of the scene complements the movements of the water. The bright highlights of the leaves contrast the dark shadows of the forest and give it a nice depth.
Like Bob, I noticed that the images seem slightly off horizontally. But as Bob said, that is likely an effect of a wide-angle lens (which is a challenge for me too. Japan has many wonderful waterfalls to visit. I used to love to visit Minoh Waterfall (Minoh-Taki/ç•é滝) when I lived in Osaka-shi.   Posted: 09/19/2021 13:45:46



 

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