Jack Florence Jr  


Bodie by Jack Florence Jr

September 2021 - Bodie

September 2021 - Jack Florence Jr

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About the Image(s)

On my recent visit to Bodie (the California state park ghost town), I wanted to capture the desolation and loneliness of the environment, hence the minimalist approach.

You’ll notice that in the original, there is a small second building, which I removed. Thoughts? I also increased the contrast to get the nearly black sky.
28mm f7.1 1/125


12 comments posted




Emil Davidzuk   Emil Davidzuk
Jack

Your image does exactly what you set out to achieve

One structure shot square on, plus you can see the sky through the window! Simple sky. No sign of a road or path to access the building either. Speaks to being alone. Food for thought, would the sky look better if the cloud above structure had just touch more white that fades going to the right?

Nice work

Emil   Posted: 09/01/2021 14:44:59



Jack Florence Jr   Jack Florence Jr
Thank you, Emil, I agree and had already bumped the white up a bit in the clouds, but will try a little more.   Posted: 09/01/2021 15:45:14



Arik Gorban   Arik Gorban
To me this looks perfect in every way. The composition with the house in the center is great. The clouds are a nice bonus. I would try to lighten the clouds on the right, but I think that it may draw the attention from the main subject and clouds in the center. Nicely done as presented.   Posted: 09/03/2021 08:39:50



Palli Gajree   Palli Gajree
Hi Jack
The central composition with hills on either side has helped here. Sky looks fine as it is. On a minor point though, would you consider darkening the foreground just a bit!   Posted: 09/03/2021 21:28:57
Jack Florence Jr   Jack Florence Jr
Thank you Palli, I agree, I think at least a bit of edge burning on the bottom would help.   Posted: 09/03/2021 21:32:19



Charles Walker   Charles Walker
Jack, you indeed did capture a minimalist image. Removing the building reinforced this perspective. Perhaps it may be too minimalist, but why not also eliminate the hazy thin cloud and the dark earth or rocks on the right side of the image to draw even more attention to the shed?   Posted: 09/04/2021 21:30:08
Jack Florence Jr   Jack Florence Jr
Thanks, Charles, I hadn't thought of that, and I think those are good ideas!   Posted: 09/05/2021 14:07:17



Gary Potts   Gary Potts
Fine art Jack...just magnificent in my view. I might select the foreground grasses and sharpen them ever so little, then darken them a tad, especially on the frame edges.   Posted: 09/05/2021 16:26:30



Melanie Hurwitz   Melanie Hurwitz
A fine presentation Jack. The desolation is obvious and compelling. Bottom edge darkening and sharpening will give it a sturdy base. I had wondered about cropping to take the shed off center, but have decided that it does not improve it any way, so great job!   Posted: 09/12/2021 19:57:04



Gary Potts   Gary Potts
Jack...

I took a minute and went back to your image from this month. See attached. I noted you had a tone in it rather than a strict black/white. I went to all black and white, lightened the cloud slightly, sharpened the foreground slightly, and added darken corners from Color Efex. You and I tend to see contrast and blacks differently, but here's my attempt at Ansel-esque!   Posted: 09/13/2021 06:56:08
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Gary Potts   Gary Potts
Jack...better late than never...I have an image posted now. I'd welcome your comments.   Posted: 09/13/2021 06:56:42
Jack Florence Jr   Jack Florence Jr
Thanks Gary, I agree it's better without the toning, and the darker sky is more Ansel-esque. For me, the cloud becomes too prominent however... thanks for the reminder I will have a look at your image for this month.   Posted: 09/13/2021 18:02:38



 

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