Stan Bormann, FPSA, MPSA
November 2023 - View from Devil's Punch Bowl
About the Image(s)
Shot down the beach from Devil's Punchbowl of the beach with fog taken 5/13/21 at about 11 AM with an Olympus Micro 4/3 camera and 12-100 f/4 lens at ISO 320, 44mm, f/16, 1/200 sec. Processed in color in Lightroom, there was a person removed from the little outcropping of grass on the left. He seemed like a distraction. Mono conversion with DxO Silver Efex with some noise reduction later in Lightroom.
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7 comments posted
I think this is a very attractive landscape, Stan. The foreground and the clouds make me feel like I'm peering into the distance through a window, to a compelling view, a great result. The foreground, midground and farground are all very clear and progressive. The beach is a strong leading line through the picture. The mono conversion is very successful I think.
I did wonder a little about removing the figure on the right as well, but it emphasises the sense of scale and distance, so on balance I'd keep it. Progressing that thought, I wonder if the figure you removed would have been OK as it would be another leading diagonal and sense of scale and distance?
There are a couple of light arc lines at that outcrop - could they be cloned out?
Posted: 11/05/2023 06:07:52
I did wonder a little about removing the figure on the right as well, but it emphasises the sense of scale and distance, so on balance I'd keep it. Progressing that thought, I wonder if the figure you removed would have been OK as it would be another leading diagonal and sense of scale and distance?
There are a couple of light arc lines at that outcrop - could they be cloned out?
Posted: 11/05/2023 06:07:52
Stan, this is truly a strong image with wonderful story, tonal range and composition.
Stan mentions the two small arcs (perhaps sand vehicle tracks that are pronounced enough to distract compared to the others that lead left to right and I have to agree. Posted: 11/18/2023 12:25:28
Stan mentions the two small arcs (perhaps sand vehicle tracks that are pronounced enough to distract compared to the others that lead left to right and I have to agree. Posted: 11/18/2023 12:25:28
Really nice composition the way you have framed the beach with the rocks and grassy knolls and included the two people to show the scale and add another dimension of interest. Just a bit darker in that light strip between sand and cliffs down in the bottom left quadrant is my only recommendation. Good tonal range and contrast. I do agree the vehicle tracks and single person could go. They are only minor distractions and dont bother me too much but it would score the image a few more points. Posted: 11/20/2023 03:27:27
Great coastal landscape. I like the inclusion of people that give it a size perspective. Posted: 11/21/2023 15:34:59
I don't like to add the "I would do this and that" since in the past people have been critical of me when I give a recommendation, so I keep them to myself, but I will take the risk with this group.
I like the composition if the shot was about the landscape and not the two persons on the beach. For me, they get lost in the vastness of the landscape. If the moment is about the people, then I would have done a tighter shot, a crop perhaps, and add some vignetting to bring the eyes towards them. I don't like vignette too much since it can feel claustrophobic, but perhaps what an instructor of mine once called a tonal hug, would work, darkening top and bottom to direct the attention to the couple. Posted: 11/21/2023 15:36:22
I like the composition if the shot was about the landscape and not the two persons on the beach. For me, they get lost in the vastness of the landscape. If the moment is about the people, then I would have done a tighter shot, a crop perhaps, and add some vignetting to bring the eyes towards them. I don't like vignette too much since it can feel claustrophobic, but perhaps what an instructor of mine once called a tonal hug, would work, darkening top and bottom to direct the attention to the couple. Posted: 11/21/2023 15:36:22
Santiago, I'd like to think that everyone in this group only says positive things, even if they are suggesting ways to improve an image. And if we don't agree with the comments another has made, we are confident to say it knowing that the others see it as constructive, as no two people think exactly alike.
From the title, I think Stan saw this as a scene rather than a picture of the couple, they are just part of the scene. But like you, I like giving many pictures a "tonal hug" when appropriate. Chris commented on the "light strip between sand and cliffs", and now I've seen that I'd be inclined to agree. Making the clouds and grass a little darker as well would be interesting, I think. Posted: 11/30/2023 15:09:33
From the title, I think Stan saw this as a scene rather than a picture of the couple, they are just part of the scene. But like you, I like giving many pictures a "tonal hug" when appropriate. Chris commented on the "light strip between sand and cliffs", and now I've seen that I'd be inclined to agree. Making the clouds and grass a little darker as well would be interesting, I think. Posted: 11/30/2023 15:09:33
You have captured the expansive scene and included both depth and scale. Well done.
Posted: 11/22/2023 15:10:11
Posted: 11/22/2023 15:10:11