Jen Carrick  


Cemetery 47 by Jen Carrick

June 2021 - Cemetery 47

About the Image(s)

I came upon this little cemetery, where some of the graves were from the 1800s.
Not at all sure if my camera captured what my eye saw!

1/320, 5.6 at Iso 250


6 comments posted




Albert Zabin   Albert Zabin
The problem I have with this photo is that I don't see what your eye saw. I suspect it was the lighttombstone on t he right. If so, There is a picture with an implied diagonal from the white tomb stone to "Armstrong" to the white tomb stone in the back Why don't you try a crop and cloning removal of the dark stone just to the left of the distant white tombstone   Posted: 06/14/2021 15:20:16



Jen Carrick   Jen Carrick
I can see I had trouble isolating a main subject. I will return and be more careful with my composition. Thanks for the suggestions   Posted: 06/14/2021 17:05:46
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Kirsti Näntö-Salonen   Kirsti Näntö-Salonen
The cemetery must have been a very special place, surrounded by the forest and the uncut grass. I have another suggestion for the crop: how about making it portrait format and including the three stones on the right. I think that would give quite a nice composition, with Armstrong, the other dark stone (although quite close to the edge) and the beautiful white one forming a triangle. What do you think?   Posted: 06/16/2021 00:26:39
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Jen Carrick   Jen Carrick
I really like the crop, Kristi. Thank you. I must get back there to recompose the image. Less is more really works in this case!   Posted: 06/20/2021 15:48:56



Ed Ford   Ed Ford
Hi Jen. I try not to read the comments of the others in the group before I formulate my own. In this case, however, I have to agree with Albert - there is no central focus in your original image so my eye wanders all over the grave yard. The subsequent versions work better for me as they give me a much better anchor for my eye allowing me to study them which (at least for me) is part of the fascination of an old grave yard - who were these people? What were they like? Are they sitting, unseen, on the tomb stones watching us (shades of "Our Town")?

Of the two others I believe I like yours somewhat better though the contrast of the new grave stone versus the old one in Kristi's is interesting.

In my opinion it was a good and evocative effort Jen. Thanks very much for sharing it with us.   Posted: 06/22/2021 20:27:16



Adrian Binney   Adrian Binney
Yes Jen, the original image doesn't work for a few reasons, but the Armstrong one is too "in you're face" with the bold lettering and apparent much younger age. There are some interesting designs there which could work as a focus.   Posted: 06/23/2021 16:20:04



 

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