Haru Nagasaki  


 The mountain torrent by Haru Nagasaki

November 2020 - The mountain torrent

November 2020 - Haru Nagasaki

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About the Image(s)

This is taken at one of the top 3 famous mountain torrent in Japan.
Although the mountain is covered by colored leaves, my focus was to capture the stream as main subject with decent slow shutter speed.
And my intention is to make silky stream line outstanding by increasing contrast when conversion to B&W.
My question on the composition (to the group):
The stream is flowing from right to left, and also there are 2 stream (upper and lower). What is your view on this composition?
D850 ISO64 @17 mm 1/10 f/9 tripod


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10 comments posted




Ata Kemal Sahin   Ata Kemal Sahin
Hi Haru, your work is really amazing, congrats. I'm not sure whether you used a ND filter. Depending ND stop, you could set a bit higher aperture and lower speed and auto ISO value would also not be too high e.g. 100 - 200 and this would provide more silky smooth. This is only a suggestion and even if I'm a bnw addict, I enjoy Mother Nature's true colors and grayish / bluish silky stream in your photo is really remarkable. Thanks for sharing.   Posted: 11/02/2020 00:51:43
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Ata for your comment. I would try different set of ISO/aperture and ss next time.
Thank you again.   Posted: 11/03/2020 20:03:14



Ying Shi   Ying Shi
I really like the silky flowing water! Would it be better to recreate the light and shadow?   Posted: 11/07/2020 19:14:01
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Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Hi Ying,
Thank you for your suggestion. This is great! Now the image become art!   Posted: 11/09/2020 20:42:29



Arne Skinlo   Arne Skinlo
To me, you have composed the picture well. The focal point is the swirl in about the midle of the picture. How much motion blur is a matter of taste, but to me, it is about right. You have some texture at the same time as the there is a sense of movement. The shutter speed is short enough to keep the the leaf in the foreground sharp, which is an essential part of the composition. My suggestion for improvements; the upper stream disturbs the composition as all the other lines lead to the foal point. The easiest way is to darken this stream. A slight crop of the left and bottom side would bring the focal point more out of senter. By lighten the highlights in the water, the picture will pop more and be more interesting.   Posted: 11/08/2020 01:54:17
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Arne.
Just to check you mentioned "crop of the left". but did you mean crop right??
There is another swirl in the left side and I do not want to crop it...   Posted: 11/09/2020 20:44:52



Bill Foy   Bill Foy
For me, this is a very moody and foreboding image, which I like. The only change I would suggest is, in addition to Arne's suggestion of darkening the upper stream, also darken the vegetation on the upper right.   Posted: 11/10/2020 14:37:33



John Roach   John Roach
(Group 64)
Excellent original conversion in my opinion.   Posted: 11/12/2020 10:14:56



Lance Lewin   Lance Lewin
(Groups 83 & 87)
Good afternoon, Haru.

This composition has been well visualized and captured as a BW rendering. Your work with Light & Shadow is excellent.

This particular perspective (and crop or frame) reveals the power, and contrasting seductive beautiful of this location.

This is one of those compositions which exhibits the Gestalt or in other words, allows the viewer to take in the "whole" as opposed to just focusing on particular details.

I would not make anything any darker, but a slight increase in the exposure of the shadow (Spot Dodging) may be beneficial.   Posted: 11/18/2020 10:50:59



Angela Chan   Angela Chan
Great shot !
Composition is fine .
I see the swirl that Arne mentioned is actually in the "Golden Ratio" line. ( Close to 5 or 7 on a clock face). You do not need to adhere strightly to composition rules but these rules are suggested because most people find that they appeal to the eyes.
One further thought about composition is the flow . Flower arrangement are best to flow from the left to the right and we usually read in the same direction.
If this is my image I might try to flip it to see which way I like it better.
I like the BW version better because if the focus is the water then the yellow vegetations would be distractions.
For milky water I really use a longer shutter speed . I can achieve that with a higher aperture number and/or a neutral density filter.
Thank you very much for sharing.   Posted: 11/30/2020 13:24:12