Haru Nagasaki  


Dahlia by Haru Nagasaki

September 2020 - Dahlia

September 2020 - Haru Nagasaki

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About the Image(s)

Objective is to highlight tone range in full-bloom flower. I included 2 buds to balance in composition.
I am posting this image to discuss the points Angela raised last month “ how much you darken down the background.
In this case, I took middle way approach, darken down the background but stay bright to show details of the leaf around the follower.
I would like to invite your comment on this point. Off-cause if you have other points to critique, that’s fine, too.
D850 60 mm ISO100 f/10 1/60 ç’ tripod
Increased contrast and darken green
Dodge and burn to some extent


15 comments posted




Ata Kemal Sahin   Ata Kemal Sahin
Definitely a beautiful flower Haru. Normally, I like nature in color but bnw here is exceptional. Background is dark enough, but reddish tones of flower(s) should have been enhanced while you were converting to bnw. Petal details are not very obvious. Regarding general tonal values; highlights could be dimmed down a bit more, midtones and shadows seem ok. Thanks for sharing.   Posted: 09/01/2020 05:40:05
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Ata for your input.
I am learning every day.   Posted: 09/01/2020 08:09:18



Arne Skinlo   Arne Skinlo
Often less is more. Darkening backgrounds or not can be discussed at length, and there are no strict rules for what is right or wrong. In this case, I would darkened the two flowers at the back and increased the highlights of the main flower. At he end I would made a vignette around the flower to make it pop out.   Posted: 09/04/2020 01:06:56
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Arne for your comment.
I reworked based on your input.
How about this? Is it too obvious?
I might darken down too much on 2 buds, though...
  Posted: 09/05/2020 22:36:12
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Arne Skinlo   Arne Skinlo
No, you have not overdone the darkening. Now you have a triangle composition where the front flower is the focus point. If you want to improve it further, you should remove the stem that comes up behind the flower and dodge the highlights on the flower to let it stand out even more. Also darken the lower left corner. Then you may put it on the wall :)

Remember, it takes many hours to make a good picture.   Posted: 09/06/2020 01:33:30
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Arne.. I appreciate your guidance.
I re-edited based on your comments.
Is this in line with what you were thinking?

  Posted: 09/06/2020 21:10:43
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Arne Skinlo   Arne Skinlo
Yes, it was something like this I had in mind. If you compare your first version with this one, you see a big differance. It pays off to use time on your photos. In addition, it trains your eyes to see what has to be improved.

If you decide to proceed for (even) more perfection, I will suggest to darken the right flower so it get the same intencity as the left one. Clone out the stem that you have darkened. Fix the leaf in lower front. Fix the leef, lower front. Darken the white lines around the stem in the lower right corner. This is very picky, but it is what it takes to make a photo that stands out from the crowd. I can mention that I use an average of about 5 hours on each picture. I leave it for a few days and then often see new things to improve. Good luck, Haru.   Posted: 09/07/2020 01:50:29
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you, Arne. Appreciate your guidance.
Let me re-do from the scratch. I will incorporate your feedback. I will come back with new image soon.
Haru   Posted: 09/07/2020 06:22:15



Arne Skinlo   Arne Skinlo
Hi Haru, I think that is a good ida. It is much better to have a few good ones instead of a bunch of awerage pictures. I think this one will end up on your wall :)   Posted: 09/07/2020 06:26:50
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Hi Arne,

This is the reworked one.
I could not do anything on the petal of bud upper right.
There is some funny reflections and it is brown out.
In such case, is there anything I can do?
Thank you for your support.   Posted: 09/07/2020 22:11:33
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Arne Skinlo   Arne Skinlo
You could not do anything about the reflection because it is burned out. The way to get around this, is to clone in a from a similar area. I took the liberty to redo the picture for you to show what I mean. I have used Photoshop cloning and dodge tool and Gradient tool in this process.   Posted: 09/08/2020 00:10:03
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Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Thank you very much, Arne.
Let me try myself.
I will come back soon.
Thank you again for all your support.
  Posted: 09/08/2020 19:10:49
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Hi Arne.
This is the latest version.
I could not do well on cloning so I did different approach.
I need to practice a bit more.

How about this image? Is this good enough for the wall or still have room for improvement?
I appreciate your feedback.   Posted: 09/09/2020 21:40:17
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Arne Skinlo   Arne Skinlo
It is good enough for the wall, but I will advice you to study more Photoshop processing if you want to improve your photo work. I would start with cloning and the Gradient tool. You find a lot on Youtube about this. Piximperfect is a good channel.   Posted: 09/10/2020 00:14:18
Haru Nagasaki   Haru Nagasaki
Hi Arne.
This is the latest version.
I could not do well on cloning so I did different approach.
I need to practice a bit more.

How about this image? Is this good enough for the wall or still have room for improvement?
I appreciate your feedback.   Posted: 09/10/2020 19:50:37
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