Julie Deer  


On The Phone by Julie Deer

August 2020 - On The Phone

August 2020 - Julie Deer

Original

About the Image(s)

This lady was so engrossed in her phone conversation that she did not even see me taking her photo. She is sitting in the cloisters at Queensland University. The lighting in the cloisters was tricky to shoot in.


7 comments posted

Henry Roberts   Henry Roberts
Julie, your slight cropping and muting the highlights and opening the shadows have produced a beautifully soft image. I enjoy the woman and then letting my eyes roam through the various portions of the image. I can't think of any changes to suggest.

Nice work!   Posted: 08/09/2020 09:11:49

Anne Nettles   Anne Nettles
Very nice Julie! I love the depth in this photo. I agree with Henry that your image is has a nice soft quality about it. I really love the leading lines and the subject's placement on the left third of the composition. The color harmony is quite nice. Well done.   Posted: 08/09/2020 13:42:14

Alison McMahan   Alison McMahan
Julie, a beautiful spot, a beautiful shot, and a good catch.
I prefer the original. I think you cropped in order to cut out that knee or shoulder or whatever if it is. Could you keep the depth and clone it out instead? And also clone out the little bit of debris in the foreground?
If you have the skill set, I'd like you to lighten inside the columns, but keep the vista through the door (the greenery in the doorway) as dark as in the original.I love the gold tones of your final and the way the pattern if highlighted by lightening the shadows. At the same time I feel that doing so has deprived us of a sense of depth.
To me it seems that your original photo was perfectly framed, no cropping needed. The strangesness of the girl on the phone in such a beautiful space resonates more, IMHO, if we see that space as bigger, deeper, with some mysterious shadows. That leads us to ask ourselves: what is she doing on the phone?   Posted: 08/09/2020 15:54:37

Andrew Hersom   Andrew Hersom
Great feeling of peace and tranquility - lovely architecture. You have got the columns nice and straight. I think the final is an improvement on the original. Good to remove the elbow sticking out. I would be tempted to clone out the detritus on the floor behind the seat too.

The only negative for me (I am nit picking) is that there is nothing at the vanishing point at the end of the "cloisters" where my eye is drawn to. A picture including someone standing there and no one on the seat might be an interesting alternative but you can't marshal the public to stand where you want them to!.   Posted: 08/10/2020 05:29:41
Alison McMahan   Alison McMahan
Andrew, I'm wondering now what she could do about a vanishing point. Perhaps illuminate the last light at the end of the cloister-walk, the one furthest away from us?
Of course, if she is going to go that far, adding a figure would be in the same line of editing. But adding a figure would change the story completely. If it's a random figure, that takes away from her being on the phone. If it is someone looking at her, that adds suspense or even menace. So I wouldn't got with a figure. She could take out the green visible through the doorway and replace it with clouds and sky-the kind you see through an airplane, or stars and galaxies like the kids saw out the windows of their flying house in that movie The Bridge to Terabitha (not sure I spelled it right). But that would make it a surreal image.
IN the end I think her story is the best one, but thinking about the options was fun.   Posted: 08/11/2020 08:52:12
Andrew Hersom   Andrew Hersom
I was merely suggesting what could make this a stronger image. Another option would be one without the seated figure and a view taken more to the left, just with a line of seats.   Posted: 08/12/2020 03:05:10

Catherine Honigsberg   Catherine Honigsberg
I really like the floor colors pulled out in the revised picture. I like it cropped or not, but I like the color patterns on the revised.   Posted: 08/10/2020 13:25:47

 

Please log in to post a comment