Donna Paul  


Hawk by Donna Paul

June 2020 - Hawk

June 2020 - Donna Paul

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ISO 6400 F-6.3 I saw this hawk in my back yard and ran out and shot. I put it on a high ISO because I knew I might only get one chance to shot the hawk before he flew away. There are a lot of trees and the it was getting ready to rain. I put in f-stop on 6.3 I wanted a shallow depth of filed maybe I should have use 8 but everything happen so fast. I was able to get 5 shots and I liked this best because the way he is looking with his eyes. I cropped and took out some noise.


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7 comments posted

Jim Horn   Jim Horn
Donna, you did very well to capture the detail, tack sharp focus on the hawk and great bokeh (background way out of focus). I thought that the bright background was making the hawk dark. I thought the right side could be cropped to bring the attention to the hawk bark and very interesting Spanish moss. I increased the exposure and added contrast and clarity in Photoshop Camera Raw filter. I tried to do something with the bright band of sunlight that sweeps to the right of the hawk. I didn't find anything that worked. Perhaps other in Digital Dialogue have good ideas and techniques.
Jim   Posted: 06/02/2020 15:22:58
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Donna Paul   Donna Paul
Jim, looks better! Yes, I saw the sun light that like a line but I did not how to fix it.   Posted: 06/03/2020 18:17:58

Jim Horn   Jim Horn
Donna, in Photoshop I used the magic lasso to select the sunbeam. In layers, I chose adjustment layer exposure, made a new magic lasso on the same sunbeam, used adjustment layer for brightness. After that I used the clone tool trying to clean up the bordering lines. Let me know if you think this is better,
Jim   Posted: 06/04/2020 10:59:28
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Sam Fernando   Sam Fernando
Good capture of the bird.

It would be nice if more details around the eye are shown. You may also apply vignette to hide the bright areas on the right side edge.   Posted: 06/07/2020 05:09:35

John Tabaczynski   John Tabaczynski
Donna,

Great capture!! I like the way you cropped the image, the foliage to the left of the hawk gives good balance and enhances the composition. Your image has great potential. I had only a few minutes to play with it and I wanted to see if I could improve the tonal balance. I felt the hawk being in the shadow is flat and diminished in importance. It needed some pop to bring it forward and increase its eye appeal. To do this I created three masks. One contains the bird and the branch, the second is its inverse to control the background, and a third to enhance the eye. All three masks employ curves adjustments. If I had more time I would create a fourth to control the vine/foliage that is to the left of the bird. For the bird/ branch adjustment I brought the curves white point to the left significantly, bent the center of the transfer curve up, and put an s-bend in the toe of the curve. I feel it gives life and detail to the branch as well as the bird. For the background mask I brought the white point down. And then bowed the curve down a bunch more. The eye adjust is a large bow up on the curve. I should note that the masks I made were done quickly with the magic selection tool and the edges were not cleaned up, so a better job can be done there. I think these curve adjustments make a big difference. If I were serious about making a print of this I would first do an up-res using PS or On1, because this image is starting to show pixelation due to the heavy crop that was needed. As noted by others the white region in the background could be muted some. I would do this by painting with a translucent soft brush using some yellow to closely match the nearby yellow hues. Do this on a separate layer so it is easy to change if you are not happy with the result. If you would like I could up load screen shots of the layer panel and curve panels to be more clear about what I described above.

Tab   Posted: 06/11/2020 09:11:53
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Laura Lee Bartholomew   Laura Lee Bartholomew
I agree with Jim about cropping the image. What I would like to see is more light in the eye. The eye is the most important part of any portrait whether it be animal or human. You might want to explore playing around with lightening the eye.   Posted: 06/11/2020 20:07:23

Laura Lee Bartholomew   Laura Lee Bartholomew
  Posted: 06/11/2020 20:07:25